Friday, December 11, 2009
essay 4 update 7-9
i have finished my paper to the fullest extent and am waiting to hand it in. there is nothing more to update.
Essay 4 update 6
i have revised my paper, changed some things and all i need to do now it hand it in.
Essay 4 update 5
i just finished the essay. now i need to edit and revise and get a second opinion about the topic, structure, flow and information.
Essay 4 update 4
i created an outline and started my first draft since i have completed my sources list.
p 800 #7
i don't really think that gender plays a part when considering the impacts of technology. there are probably a similar ratio with men and women employees; therefore a joint agreement on the software and analytical improvements.
P 752 #2
Sleeper Curve is defined as a type of good brainwashing in modern pop culture and media. Most t.v. shows and interactive games provide this sleeper curve. In video games, it is a constructive way to waste time; where as in sports, it also allots for some skills to be gained and lessons to be taught.
P 729 #6
In the media today, Jenkins's ideas are proven very clearly. The different targets by advertising and the use or enjoyment that the item is supposed to give. Children are targeted by quite literally, childish things like toys, candy or cheap fun. The types of things that are geared towards them i think are pretty much unisex, approved by boys and girls. However, teenagers and adults are targeted for on a whole different level; the different spaces that Jenkins talked about is shown and is very accurate. Movies like The Ugly Truth, are geared towards girls because of the love scenes and the plot and storyline. Movies like SAW are directed towards guys because of gore and action, suspense along with the plot and storyline. Movies like The Hangover, can be considered unisex because all of the spaces are connected and intertwined together so all of the mediums are met. Popular Culture aimed at children provide a very simple motto: Simple Pleasures for Simple Minds.
P729 #2
This is about the author and how he a wide area of prairie-like grasslands to play on when he was a young child. He discusses how there is a never-ending fear for his children and the future, there will be no areas to play in that isn't hardwood or carpet.
Moving Beyond "Home Base": Why Physical Space Matters:
This section is about how the difference between boys and girls and how boys would prefer to play outside rather than stay in the house like girls, to be more like their mothers. He explains that most girls are not as adventurous as boys and compare and contrast differences between children at an early age.
Putting Boy Culture Back In The Home:
This section is primarily about how and why boys play outside as mentioned previously.
Gendered Games/ Gendered Books: Toward A Culture Geography Of Imaginary Spaces:
This section is about how the attitudes and development on the playground will give a window of how they will act when they get older. Also, the books they read mold their minds and contribute to their personal morals and values on right and wrong.
Adventure Islands: Boy Space:
This section explains the excitement and search for adventure in boys while doing activities or playing games. Studies show that boys are more likely to lean towards and choose "risk" games due to the danger or risk that is given while playing the game.
Secret Gardens: Girl Space:
This section is about how girls move toward sensitive or romantic or even secret/ gossip environments rather than adventure because that is what they are drawn to- their own world.
A Play Town: Another Space For Girls?:
This section refers to some of the games and activities that were made just for girls. These games have all of the specific and playable traits for girls to have that include everything from the previous section, and rejects all possibility for boys to have interest.
Conclusion: Toward A Gender-Neutral Play Space?:
This final section connects all aspects of the essay together like the differences between boys and girls. Concluding all final thoughts and tying up all lose ends and planting a cliffhanging opposition that makes you think and come up with your own views and your thoughts on how this should end.
Moving Beyond "Home Base": Why Physical Space Matters:
This section is about how the difference between boys and girls and how boys would prefer to play outside rather than stay in the house like girls, to be more like their mothers. He explains that most girls are not as adventurous as boys and compare and contrast differences between children at an early age.
Putting Boy Culture Back In The Home:
This section is primarily about how and why boys play outside as mentioned previously.
Gendered Games/ Gendered Books: Toward A Culture Geography Of Imaginary Spaces:
This section is about how the attitudes and development on the playground will give a window of how they will act when they get older. Also, the books they read mold their minds and contribute to their personal morals and values on right and wrong.
Adventure Islands: Boy Space:
This section explains the excitement and search for adventure in boys while doing activities or playing games. Studies show that boys are more likely to lean towards and choose "risk" games due to the danger or risk that is given while playing the game.
Secret Gardens: Girl Space:
This section is about how girls move toward sensitive or romantic or even secret/ gossip environments rather than adventure because that is what they are drawn to- their own world.
A Play Town: Another Space For Girls?:
This section refers to some of the games and activities that were made just for girls. These games have all of the specific and playable traits for girls to have that include everything from the previous section, and rejects all possibility for boys to have interest.
Conclusion: Toward A Gender-Neutral Play Space?:
This final section connects all aspects of the essay together like the differences between boys and girls. Concluding all final thoughts and tying up all lose ends and planting a cliffhanging opposition that makes you think and come up with your own views and your thoughts on how this should end.
TSIS p132 #2
After looking at the essay, I have indeed used some of the generic or specific moves, it allows for the writer to become more comfortable and commentate throughout the paper. The title of the paper was Beauty In Society; it is short, sweet and to the point and tells the reader what it is about. By using the introduction as a road map or outline, it orchestrates where the text will go by only providing introductory information, then explaining in detail later on in the paper. I basically use metacommentary to help me get my ideas across and elaborate on previous sub-points or viewpoints to connect all of the ideas together and conclude all thoughts. My text is satisfactory in length and I already used some of the metacommentary moves to fill in some blank or lean areas.
TSIS p114 #2
After reviewing an essay, I found that I use most, if not all, of these connecting parts. I rely on all of them because they are necessary to have in a decent paper. By depending on transitions and pointing terms, it provides an easy switch between topics with connections-what your trying to portray- and using examples from your text to show strong references to connect the various parts of your essay. The only issue that I found was, while writing the paper, it was hard to connect some of the topics and by jumping right in, it shows little effort. It is important to understand all parts of the topic, resulting in an ease of writing and it will flow with all of the proper parts and become easy to follow, connect and compel your argument or opinion.
Thursday, December 10, 2009
TSIS p87 #2
After looking back at an essay that I wrote, I noticed I have several arguments within it. I researched the two sides of technology such as emailing, texting, video chatting and watching television. Since I was writing a persuasive essay, I needed to provide my argument which was, with all of the advancements of technology, humans are losing the ability to communicate verbally- face to face, but also needed to provide counter-arguments to show some positives. I will admit that I was biased while writing it, primarily because the research I found was so aggressive and there was little researched work on the counter-arguments. After I finished my research, I thought about this essay and made my own objections and feelings about the topic, which just so happened to correspond to the original argument. I think that the use of a naysayer in the paper strengthens your argument, it allows the writer to be somewhat biased and note thier own opinions with qualified research to back it up. With a stronger argument and clear and concise objections, it allows the reader to judge your work and come up with their own opinions and conduct research of their own.
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